'I will survive' as a literal sentence — complete with the subject pronoun.

What a Japanese person actually thinks
Reads exactly like page 12 of a beginner's Japanese workbook. The 私は is the tell — no native speaker would include it here.

Meaning

Literally: I + (topic) + will survive
Actually: A grammatically complete sentence. Japanese normally drops 私は entirely; including it makes the whole thing sound like a textbook example.

Scores

Naturalness●●●●●

Grammatical but unnatural. Explicit subject pronouns mark text as translated or as language-learning material.

Coolness●●●●●

Six characters, three hiragana, and it announces itself as a translation exercise.

Watch out

highIncluding 私は is one of the clearest non-native tells in written Japanese. Dropping it would already improve this a lot.

Get this instead

生き抜く ikinuku
to survive it through to the end

The verb Japanese actually uses for surviving something long and hard. No pronoun, and the 抜く carries real grit.
不屈 fukutsu
unyielding

Two characters. Says the same thing about you without narrating it.

On skin

私は生き残る

Orientation: vertical

N/A — change the words.